Tuesday, March 20, 2018
Book Review (w/ mine): Something Lost, LDS Beta Readers Flash Fiction Collection Part One
It seems like I'm doing a lot of book reviews lately. I guess that's because I've joined some writing circles.
This one is a little different from the previous books. It's a small anthology of short-short pieces in a format called "Flash Fiction", where we write a complete story in 1000 words or less. It has an introduction, some sort of plot element, and a resolution.
This anthology includes women's fiction, a lot of family fiction, several small pieces of love stories, social commentary, dystopian vision, fairies, a princess, two pieces on interrupted interstellar exploration, a bit of looking beyond the grave, abusive relationships, and even a street racer with too much lust for speed.
The common theme is loss, and there are people suffering serious loss in these stories. But many of them contain a bit of finding, as well, so it's not going to be a total downer to read. I'd even venture to say there's an overall positive feeling to it, a sense of finding in the midst of loss.
But the real difference is that I have a piece in here. It's called "First Cut". I was thinking of a song by Cat Stevens, covered by Rod Stewart and (I didn't know this 'til just now.) Sheryl Crow. I sort of ask the question, is the first cut really the deepest?
The writing is good overall, the themes meaningful, and the stories short, so these would also be good practice reading for students of English as a second language.
It goes live on Amazon tomorrow.
Monday, March 19, 2018
NHK Is at It Again -- また NHK が狡い話もって回ってくる
I posted on this a couple of years ago. But I never finished translating that post to Japanese.
二年前の投稿この話を取り上げたけど日本語になおすのは怠ってしまいました。未だ終わっていない。
The information in that post is stale.
その投稿の情報がもう古いです。
NHK is not bad public television for content, I think. I don't know. I haven't really watched them in more than twenty years. (We have sometimes watched at my in-law's house.)
公共テレビ放送としては、 NHK の内容は悪くないのです。悪くないでしょう。もう、二十年以上あまり見てへんから、現在の様子がわかりません。(妻の実家で偶に見たりしてたのです。)
But the way they fund their operations is screwed up.
だけど、その経営費を募る方法はめちゃくちゃなの。
In the US, we pay part of the public broadcast operating costs from taxes. The rest of the funds are raised through donations -- real donations. More-or-less freely given donations. Nobody forces anyone to pay.
米国では、公共テレビ放送の経費の一部が税金から賄われる。そのあまりが募金ですが、これは本物の寄付金です。だいたい自由のこころから発生する寄付金です。強制的に払わせられることはありません。
And there's no need to explain why to anyone, especially if you aren't making enough to pay taxes.
払わない訳を誰にも申し立てる必要もありません。特に、税金を払うほどの収入が無い場合では誰にも自分の状況について説得する必要ありません。
Yeah, there is a little emotional arm-twisting. If (and only if) you are watching a public channel during the fund-raising drives, they go after your sympathies, your sense of civic duty, and your interest in maintaining programming. It's sort of like commercial breaks, advertizing for donations.
まあ、精神的な圧力をかけることが募金期間中にあれば、それはね、公共放送を視ていない人には効かへん。つまり、営利的広告らしいコマーシャルブレークを利用して、ヒトの同情を募らせる。市民責任感に訴える。そして、良い番組を見続けたい欲張りに語りかけて、その維持費を要求する。
こういう精神的圧力なら全く文句言うことありません。その根拠が現実そのものです。そして、その放送局が提供してくれる番組などが要らない人は、また収入に困って払う余地のない方々は寄付する機会を逃しても、負担が生じないのです。
In fact, if you don't watch TV at all, you miss out completely on the chance to support them. Maybe that's a shame from some points of view, but it's part of the cost of freedom.
実状、テレビを全く見ない皆さまは寄付する機会に気がつかないかも知れません。残念な結果と思っても、自由を認めた瞬間に、こんな結果も出ること承知していらっしゃるのです。ある程度の最適ではない結果を許せない限り、自由を維持することができなくなってしまうからです。自由の代価負担の一つです。
Not every person can support every worthy endeavour -- it's just not possible. We have to choose which worthwhile projects and institutions we support with our limited resources.
全ての相応しい努力に全ての人が関わるというようなことがありません。不可能です。各々の人が、本人の限られた資産から取り出して、本人の価値観に従って、相応しい企画や団体などの中から選んで、できるところだけを支えるのです。
If not, we'll all go broke.
さもなければ、皆様一斉にパンクして破産してしまう。
For people who don't know what I'm ranting about, NHK is the Japanese public broadcast organization (see wikipedia -- Nippon Hōsō Kyōkai). If you live here long-term, the NHK collectors come around once a year, unless you arrange for direct deposit from your bank.
この内容がわからない方のためですが、 NHK というモノが日本に於ける公共放送の団体(ウィキペディアの日本放送協会を参照)です。長く日本に滞在する方は、毎年集金に回ってく来て頂くことがあります。直接振込の申請しなければ。
The line they give you is something like this:
話の流れはこんな感じです。
そうか。テレビを見ない人は?
(へっ?テレビを視るのが市民に課せられた道徳的義務となったのですか?)
We don't own a TV.
テレビ持っていません。
(ワンセグとは特に携帯器具のための解像度の低いテレビ機能です。)
You can't get a cheap cell phone without 1-Seg. But I never use it.
ワンセグ無しの安い携帯は手に入れません。それでも、使っていません。
入れて欲しいと言わなかったけど。
平成28年の埼玉県の裁判の結果、ワンセグは義務を発生しないことになったのです。
(NHK はどれほどの圧力を掛けることによってだったかな?)
I don't make a lot of money.
ボクには収入はさほどあまりありません。
なるほど。税金の一つですね。
払うのが課せられたいるのに税金とどう違いますか?
支払いは課せられているのですね。
なるほど。私の意志の有無に関わらず取り立てられた徴収ですね。
不合理な推論ではありませんか?
(電話の言及がないかも知れない。数十年の間、テレビ在る自宅は圧倒的に電話在る自宅よりも多かったのです。)
Why isn't it collected with the rest of my taxes?
どうして他の税金と一緒に徴税されていないのですか?
払わなかったらどうなりますか?
(Yes, beg that fundamental misunderstanding about responsibility. Responsibility cannot be externally imposed.)
(もちろん、責任の基本的な勘違いに頼みましょう、ネ。責任何か外から課せられるようなものではないけど。)
In English, it just sounds obstinate -- hardsell. In Japanese, it's a veiled threat.
英語にしてはただの頑固な押し売りみたいです。日本語にしては裏の脅迫のようなものです。
And, apparently, especially if they can get you to write answers on a survey or sign some form which they will insist you must sign if you are not going to pay, there are some teeth to the threat.
読んだ話によると、払わないと言うと調査に記述して欲しいといわれて、何らかの書類に署名らしい署名をつけて下さいと、更に言われるようです。それに応じると契約ができてしまうようです。契約ができてしまうと法律上の義務もでき、脅迫には歯が現れる。
I've heard of people being charged thousands of dollars in back-fees.
遡って百万円分の受信料を請求される話も聞いたことがあります。
And, apparently, once you donate just once, once you put your pen to anything they give you, you are contractually obligated to continue donating until you die or are declared unable to work any more.
これも話しによるのですが、一度寄付したら、一度署名したら、契約ができて一緒支払う義務もできてしまうそうです。死ぬまでか、もう、仕事が不可能の障害を被るまでその契約が解除されないそうです。
And, if you don't like the programming one year, you can't just refuse to pay as a form of complaint. それに、例えばある年は、その一年の番組などのプログラミングが気に入れなかったとすると、文句を聞いてもらうために支払いを取りやめることができません。
On the other hand, I have read that there is talk of forcing NHK to putting your contract on hold if you tell them your TV is on the blink.
その反面に、テレビが故障しているという連絡だけでその義務を停止するような制度を NHK に押し付ける話も聞いたことがあります。
It would be far simpler just to make the donations voluntary, like it is in the US.
アメリカのように、受信料を寄付金化にするほうがずっと簡単に済むのではありません?
There's definitely a problem here.
問題です。
Just for the record, even though I don't watch TV, if I had the money, and if I knew I could do it voluntarily, I would donate, just as a matter of principle.
言っとくけど、テレビを見ない主義にしても、お金の余裕の状況が在って、自分の自由意思のもとで寄付することが可能だという状況だったら、道徳の原則として寄付することは寄付するつもりです。
I supported public television in the States when I had the money.
アメリカで、お金の余裕があって生活していた時、公共テレビに寄付金を送りました。
I think it's important. I just don't agree with the way they raise money here in Japan.
大事だと思います。ただ単に日本で行なっている募金の方法に賛成できません。
二年前の投稿この話を取り上げたけど日本語になおすのは怠ってしまいました。未だ終わっていない。
The information in that post is stale.
その投稿の情報がもう古いです。
NHK is not bad public television for content, I think. I don't know. I haven't really watched them in more than twenty years. (We have sometimes watched at my in-law's house.)
公共テレビ放送としては、 NHK の内容は悪くないのです。悪くないでしょう。もう、二十年以上あまり見てへんから、現在の様子がわかりません。(妻の実家で偶に見たりしてたのです。)
But the way they fund their operations is screwed up.
だけど、その経営費を募る方法はめちゃくちゃなの。
In the US, we pay part of the public broadcast operating costs from taxes. The rest of the funds are raised through donations -- real donations. More-or-less freely given donations. Nobody forces anyone to pay.
米国では、公共テレビ放送の経費の一部が税金から賄われる。そのあまりが募金ですが、これは本物の寄付金です。だいたい自由のこころから発生する寄付金です。強制的に払わせられることはありません。
And there's no need to explain why to anyone, especially if you aren't making enough to pay taxes.
払わない訳を誰にも申し立てる必要もありません。特に、税金を払うほどの収入が無い場合では誰にも自分の状況について説得する必要ありません。
Yeah, there is a little emotional arm-twisting. If (and only if) you are watching a public channel during the fund-raising drives, they go after your sympathies, your sense of civic duty, and your interest in maintaining programming. It's sort of like commercial breaks, advertizing for donations.
まあ、精神的な圧力をかけることが募金期間中にあれば、それはね、公共放送を視ていない人には効かへん。つまり、営利的広告らしいコマーシャルブレークを利用して、ヒトの同情を募らせる。市民責任感に訴える。そして、良い番組を見続けたい欲張りに語りかけて、その維持費を要求する。
We need your help! Look at all the good we do with your money. Look at the great programs that we produce and broadcast! Look at what the children and adults who can't afford or don't want high-price cutting-edge Hollywood pseudo-entertainment would miss out on! And look at the great programs we know you've been watching, that we'll have to cut if you don't donate!I have no problems with this kind of arm-twisting. It's based in realistic expectations and it allows people who don't want it or count afford it to pass.
助けて下さい!皆様の賜り物のお陰で、こんな素晴らしい番組を提供させていただいています。我々の予算がなければ、ハリウッドから出る偽物の娯楽が要らなく、その高額さに金銭的余地がない大人も子供もこの素晴らしい番組などすら楽しめなくなってしまうのです。あなたがたもこの素晴らしいプログラミングを楽しんできていますが、賜っていただけなくなったら削っていくしかございません。ご協力おねがいします!
こういう精神的圧力なら全く文句言うことありません。その根拠が現実そのものです。そして、その放送局が提供してくれる番組などが要らない人は、また収入に困って払う余地のない方々は寄付する機会を逃しても、負担が生じないのです。
In fact, if you don't watch TV at all, you miss out completely on the chance to support them. Maybe that's a shame from some points of view, but it's part of the cost of freedom.
実状、テレビを全く見ない皆さまは寄付する機会に気がつかないかも知れません。残念な結果と思っても、自由を認めた瞬間に、こんな結果も出ること承知していらっしゃるのです。ある程度の最適ではない結果を許せない限り、自由を維持することができなくなってしまうからです。自由の代価負担の一つです。
Not every person can support every worthy endeavour -- it's just not possible. We have to choose which worthwhile projects and institutions we support with our limited resources.
全ての相応しい努力に全ての人が関わるというようなことがありません。不可能です。各々の人が、本人の限られた資産から取り出して、本人の価値観に従って、相応しい企画や団体などの中から選んで、できるところだけを支えるのです。
If not, we'll all go broke.
さもなければ、皆様一斉にパンクして破産してしまう。
For people who don't know what I'm ranting about, NHK is the Japanese public broadcast organization (see wikipedia -- Nippon Hōsō Kyōkai). If you live here long-term, the NHK collectors come around once a year, unless you arrange for direct deposit from your bank.
この内容がわからない方のためですが、 NHK というモノが日本に於ける公共放送の団体(ウィキペディアの日本放送協会を参照)です。長く日本に滞在する方は、毎年集金に回ってく来て頂くことがあります。直接振込の申請しなければ。
The line they give you is something like this:
話の流れはこんな感じです。
This is your civic and mora duty because you live here.Oh? What if I don't watch TV?
日本に住んでいることによって道徳上の市民的義務です。
そうか。テレビを見ない人は?
You can't be serious. This is an obligation, a responsibility. NHK has the duty to provide unbiased news and emergency information in natural disasters. Everybody watches TV.(What -- watching TV is a moral and civic duty?)
真面目な話ししてくれ。義務です。責任です。 NHK には偏見なしの情報と、災害のときに緊急連絡を提供する責任を授かっています。皆様はテレビを視ています。
(へっ?テレビを視るのが市民に課せられた道徳的義務となったのですか?)
We don't own a TV.
テレビ持っていません。
What? That's ridiculous. And it doesn't make any difference. Do you have a cell phone with 1-Seg?(1-Seg is low-resolution TV function especially for portable devices.)
なに?まさか。イヤイヤ関係ありません。ワンセグ付きの携帯電話を持っていません?
(ワンセグとは特に携帯器具のための解像度の低いテレビ機能です。)
You can't get a cheap cell phone without 1-Seg. But I never use it.
ワンセグ無しの安い携帯は手に入れません。それでも、使っていません。
So you have a TV.I didn't ask for it.
だから、テレビを持っていらっしゃるのですね。
入れて欲しいと言わなかったけど。
But you have a TV.In 2016, there was a court case in Saitama that determined that 1-Seg did not incur any obligation.
しかし、テレビを持っていらっしゃる。
平成28年の埼玉県の裁判の結果、ワンセグは義務を発生しないことになったのです。
In 2017, there was a court case in Mito that it does.(How much pressure did NHK have to bring to bear for that?)
水戸では、平成29年の裁判で義務が認められています。
(NHK はどれほどの圧力を掛けることによってだったかな?)
I don't make a lot of money.
ボクには収入はさほどあまりありません。
Well, you can file a report on how much you earn and your disabilities and such with the NHK offices and maybe you can get an exception.So this is a tax that I have to pay?
そういう場合なら、NHK の事務所に来て頂いて、収入と障害などのことを報告して例外を申請することが可能かも知れません。
なるほど。税金の一つですね。
No, it's not a tax.How is it different from a tax if I am required to pay?
否、税金ではありません。
払うのが課せられたいるのに税金とどう違いますか?
It's not a tax.But I'm required to pay?
税金ではありません。
支払いは課せられているのですね。
Of course.So it's levied against me, against my will.
無論。
なるほど。私の意志の有無に関わらず取り立てられた徴収ですね。
You pay for your water and electricity, right?Isn't that non sequitur?
水と電気の請求を払っていますね。
不合理な推論ではありませんか?
(Blank looks.)(They might not mention phone bill, because there were several decades where there were way more households with TVs than with phones.)
(無理解の表情。)
(電話の言及がないかも知れない。数十年の間、テレビ在る自宅は圧倒的に電話在る自宅よりも多かったのです。)
Why isn't it collected with the rest of my taxes?
どうして他の税金と一緒に徴税されていないのですか?
It's not a tax.What happens if I don't pay?
税金ではありません。
払わなかったらどうなりますか?
But you aren't allowed to not pay. It's an obligation. It's your duty as a resident.
払わないのはできませんよ。義務です。日本に住む人の責任です。
(Yes, beg that fundamental misunderstanding about responsibility. Responsibility cannot be externally imposed.)
(もちろん、責任の基本的な勘違いに頼みましょう、ネ。責任何か外から課せられるようなものではないけど。)
In English, it just sounds obstinate -- hardsell. In Japanese, it's a veiled threat.
英語にしてはただの頑固な押し売りみたいです。日本語にしては裏の脅迫のようなものです。
And, apparently, especially if they can get you to write answers on a survey or sign some form which they will insist you must sign if you are not going to pay, there are some teeth to the threat.
読んだ話によると、払わないと言うと調査に記述して欲しいといわれて、何らかの書類に署名らしい署名をつけて下さいと、更に言われるようです。それに応じると契約ができてしまうようです。契約ができてしまうと法律上の義務もでき、脅迫には歯が現れる。
I've heard of people being charged thousands of dollars in back-fees.
遡って百万円分の受信料を請求される話も聞いたことがあります。
And, apparently, once you donate just once, once you put your pen to anything they give you, you are contractually obligated to continue donating until you die or are declared unable to work any more.
これも話しによるのですが、一度寄付したら、一度署名したら、契約ができて一緒支払う義務もできてしまうそうです。死ぬまでか、もう、仕事が不可能の障害を被るまでその契約が解除されないそうです。
And, if you don't like the programming one year, you can't just refuse to pay as a form of complaint. それに、例えばある年は、その一年の番組などのプログラミングが気に入れなかったとすると、文句を聞いてもらうために支払いを取りやめることができません。
On the other hand, I have read that there is talk of forcing NHK to putting your contract on hold if you tell them your TV is on the blink.
その反面に、テレビが故障しているという連絡だけでその義務を停止するような制度を NHK に押し付ける話も聞いたことがあります。
It would be far simpler just to make the donations voluntary, like it is in the US.
アメリカのように、受信料を寄付金化にするほうがずっと簡単に済むのではありません?
There's definitely a problem here.
問題です。
Just for the record, even though I don't watch TV, if I had the money, and if I knew I could do it voluntarily, I would donate, just as a matter of principle.
言っとくけど、テレビを見ない主義にしても、お金の余裕の状況が在って、自分の自由意思のもとで寄付することが可能だという状況だったら、道徳の原則として寄付することは寄付するつもりです。
I supported public television in the States when I had the money.
アメリカで、お金の余裕があって生活していた時、公共テレビに寄付金を送りました。
I think it's important. I just don't agree with the way they raise money here in Japan.
大事だと思います。ただ単に日本で行なっている募金の方法に賛成できません。
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Wednesday, March 14, 2018
Writers: About Those Rules (Grammar, Word Choice, Style)
(This is about writing, not religion -- unless your religion is your writing.)
In the New Testament, we often see Jesus calling the Scribes and Pharisees, and hypocrits in general, to repentance. Among their sins, He names the tendency to focus too much on the letter of the law and not enough on the spirit thereof.
In particular, He chastises them for making it harder for others to get into the kingdom of heaven. (See Luke 11, starting around verse 39, but especially 52; also Matthew 23, especially verses 13 and 15.)
But I don't recall much recorded in which He chastised people for bad grammar or bad word choice or unfashionable language style.
In LDS scripture, we see a note that Adam had a perfect language.
No, wait. It says, "pure and undefiled".
Now, that fact was important for us, but the language itself seems not to have been as important. We don't have his language, so we can only speculate as to its nature, particularly, in what way it was pure and undefiled.
Does that mean he used perfect grammar? Or does it mean something else?
Where did the grammar rules for any language currently in use come from? Who wrote our dictionaries and our manuals of style?
We might suspect it, but linguists will tell us it is true. The grammar, dictionaries, Thesaurses, style manuals, all of the tools we have for analyzing what we have written come from our own hands. The language itself predates them.
And?
I am not arguing that skill with language is bad. It helps to be able to be precise when we speak or write. Precision is not evil, unless it is used for evil.
And I admit it, by the way. I am not nearly as precise in my Japanese as I am in my English. Up until just a few days ago, I have been unwilling to attempt to write fiction in Japanese.
I will try to help fellow writers with grammar, word choice, style, structure, and other tools of technique. But I often feel at conflict with myself in the attempt.
Here's why.
Even though linguists call the rules things like "rules of production", those rules are not used in producing speech or rhetoric. They are used in producing analyzable strings of the sorts of symbols that linguists use to analyze.
The best use of grammars and dictionaries is as aids in understanding what we've written.
And manuals of style are artifacts of fashion. They are in constant flux.
If you need a technical report, sure. Use that manual of style. Lots of other reports-kinds of writing work best when they follow some manual of style.
When writing fiction for a closed genre, there are manuals of style. (But they still exist in a state of flux.)
But.
Closed means closed. Here's another hint from linguists. Meaning is not found in reproducing what has been done before as much as it is found when creating something new.
That means that your style as a writer exists in the tension between your efforts to follow the rules and your occasions to break them.
I have tried to help several authors whose grammar and word choice are less than standard. I think of four specific cases where my help seems not to have helped.
I myself was waylaid by a structure Pharisee in a writers group where I participated briefly last year --
My first novel did not need a hook in the first chapter. It was not intended to be a bestseller. An ordinary sort of hook will get in the way of that story. Yet, I let that (well-intentioned, I think) more experienced writer induce me to get a lot of practice writing myself in circles, trying to get that hook into place.
Practice is practice, and is not completely useless, but I needed to be working on other things by now, and that novel is not yet finished. The delay is in no small part caused by my spending too much time focusing on the wrong things. I was trying to put a hook in when I needed to be fixing the metastructure.
And this is where several of my friends are now stuck. They are focused on hooks, grammar, word choice, style, flow, and other such things when they need to be focusing on other things. Or, perhaps, taking a break and reading, or writing something else, or getting out into the real world, so they can come back and look with fresh eyes.
Some of them need to do what I ultimately did -- throw several months of edits in the junk pile and go back to a previous version from before they started listening to the wrong advice. One, in particular, may need to throw multiple months of edits in that junk pile and just publish the novel.
With its warts.
And I'm not actually convinced that my efforts on my first novel to avoid misleading people by my references to the Church I belong to are completely necessary. I may still be doing too much re-write instead of just clearing a bunch of unnecessary linkage from my first novel, where it sits in one of my blogs.
With its warts and non-standard features and love handles and such.
I was raised on books that didn't make the best-seller list. I don't remember some of their names. The grammar was wrong in many, although it tended to be consistent.
I say, wrong. I should say, non-standard, because there is no wrong grammar without context, and a novel is its own context.
So, what am I saying?
Writers, do not fear Microsoft's grammar checker.
Turn off the spelling checker, too. Only run the spelling checker once a day or so, and don't believe everything it tells you.
Keep the mechanical grammar checker turned off.
Emphasize that. You do not want your grammar sounding like it was written by a cookie-cutter.
Are you in a panic? Settle down. Microsoft is a company that claims to sell 80-20 solutions. Even if those claims were accurate, that's twenty percent wrong. But it's more like 20-80 and a lot of bluster. These guys are salescrew. What they sell is confidence.
You know, the Music Man, but with no heart.
What you need is confidence, not grammar checkers. Sure, your first novel may not be the best. You can polish it a bit, but there comes a point where you improve more by leaving it behind and writing the next one.
Why? Because the next one allows you to build new skills, and some of those are the skills you need to get that first one polished right.
(Don't be afraid to come back in six months or six decades and see what you can do with the ones you left behind. Arthur C. Clarke did that with Against the Fall of Night and produced The City and the Stars. I personally prefer the former, but both are good SF novels, and he thought the latter told the story better according to his older self's point of view.)
So you don't have the confidence? What instead?
If you can find a group of readers (beta readers is a well-used term right now, critique group is another) who can help you in useful ways without encouraging you to chase your tail, such a group can be useful. If they don't help you with the confidence after a little while, thank them and find new people to help.
Prayer helps, if you know God. If you don't know God or don't believe, meditation and listening to your heart is another way to describe it.
It's not wrong to learn the rules, but you must write new stuff to learn the rules better than you know them now. (This rant is too long, or I'd explain that. But it's another mathematical principle.)
The reason you write is to communicate something meaningful to people. Rules can only help about twenty percent of the way. The rest is the work you put into getting the message into the media.
In the New Testament, we often see Jesus calling the Scribes and Pharisees, and hypocrits in general, to repentance. Among their sins, He names the tendency to focus too much on the letter of the law and not enough on the spirit thereof.
In particular, He chastises them for making it harder for others to get into the kingdom of heaven. (See Luke 11, starting around verse 39, but especially 52; also Matthew 23, especially verses 13 and 15.)
But I don't recall much recorded in which He chastised people for bad grammar or bad word choice or unfashionable language style.
In LDS scripture, we see a note that Adam had a perfect language.
No, wait. It says, "pure and undefiled".
Now, that fact was important for us, but the language itself seems not to have been as important. We don't have his language, so we can only speculate as to its nature, particularly, in what way it was pure and undefiled.
Does that mean he used perfect grammar? Or does it mean something else?
Where did the grammar rules for any language currently in use come from? Who wrote our dictionaries and our manuals of style?
We might suspect it, but linguists will tell us it is true. The grammar, dictionaries, Thesaurses, style manuals, all of the tools we have for analyzing what we have written come from our own hands. The language itself predates them.
And?
I am not arguing that skill with language is bad. It helps to be able to be precise when we speak or write. Precision is not evil, unless it is used for evil.
And I admit it, by the way. I am not nearly as precise in my Japanese as I am in my English. Up until just a few days ago, I have been unwilling to attempt to write fiction in Japanese.
I will try to help fellow writers with grammar, word choice, style, structure, and other tools of technique. But I often feel at conflict with myself in the attempt.
Here's why.
Even though linguists call the rules things like "rules of production", those rules are not used in producing speech or rhetoric. They are used in producing analyzable strings of the sorts of symbols that linguists use to analyze.
The best use of grammars and dictionaries is as aids in understanding what we've written.
And manuals of style are artifacts of fashion. They are in constant flux.
If you need a technical report, sure. Use that manual of style. Lots of other reports-kinds of writing work best when they follow some manual of style.
When writing fiction for a closed genre, there are manuals of style. (But they still exist in a state of flux.)
But.
Closed means closed. Here's another hint from linguists. Meaning is not found in reproducing what has been done before as much as it is found when creating something new.
That means that your style as a writer exists in the tension between your efforts to follow the rules and your occasions to break them.
I have tried to help several authors whose grammar and word choice are less than standard. I think of four specific cases where my help seems not to have helped.
I myself was waylaid by a structure Pharisee in a writers group where I participated briefly last year --
My first novel did not need a hook in the first chapter. It was not intended to be a bestseller. An ordinary sort of hook will get in the way of that story. Yet, I let that (well-intentioned, I think) more experienced writer induce me to get a lot of practice writing myself in circles, trying to get that hook into place.
Practice is practice, and is not completely useless, but I needed to be working on other things by now, and that novel is not yet finished. The delay is in no small part caused by my spending too much time focusing on the wrong things. I was trying to put a hook in when I needed to be fixing the metastructure.
And this is where several of my friends are now stuck. They are focused on hooks, grammar, word choice, style, flow, and other such things when they need to be focusing on other things. Or, perhaps, taking a break and reading, or writing something else, or getting out into the real world, so they can come back and look with fresh eyes.
Some of them need to do what I ultimately did -- throw several months of edits in the junk pile and go back to a previous version from before they started listening to the wrong advice. One, in particular, may need to throw multiple months of edits in that junk pile and just publish the novel.
With its warts.
And I'm not actually convinced that my efforts on my first novel to avoid misleading people by my references to the Church I belong to are completely necessary. I may still be doing too much re-write instead of just clearing a bunch of unnecessary linkage from my first novel, where it sits in one of my blogs.
With its warts and non-standard features and love handles and such.
I was raised on books that didn't make the best-seller list. I don't remember some of their names. The grammar was wrong in many, although it tended to be consistent.
I say, wrong. I should say, non-standard, because there is no wrong grammar without context, and a novel is its own context.
So, what am I saying?
Writers, do not fear Microsoft's grammar checker.
Turn off the spelling checker, too. Only run the spelling checker once a day or so, and don't believe everything it tells you.
Keep the mechanical grammar checker turned off.
Emphasize that. You do not want your grammar sounding like it was written by a cookie-cutter.
Are you in a panic? Settle down. Microsoft is a company that claims to sell 80-20 solutions. Even if those claims were accurate, that's twenty percent wrong. But it's more like 20-80 and a lot of bluster. These guys are salescrew. What they sell is confidence.
You know, the Music Man, but with no heart.
What you need is confidence, not grammar checkers. Sure, your first novel may not be the best. You can polish it a bit, but there comes a point where you improve more by leaving it behind and writing the next one.
Why? Because the next one allows you to build new skills, and some of those are the skills you need to get that first one polished right.
(Don't be afraid to come back in six months or six decades and see what you can do with the ones you left behind. Arthur C. Clarke did that with Against the Fall of Night and produced The City and the Stars. I personally prefer the former, but both are good SF novels, and he thought the latter told the story better according to his older self's point of view.)
So you don't have the confidence? What instead?
If you can find a group of readers (beta readers is a well-used term right now, critique group is another) who can help you in useful ways without encouraging you to chase your tail, such a group can be useful. If they don't help you with the confidence after a little while, thank them and find new people to help.
Prayer helps, if you know God. If you don't know God or don't believe, meditation and listening to your heart is another way to describe it.
It's not wrong to learn the rules, but you must write new stuff to learn the rules better than you know them now. (This rant is too long, or I'd explain that. But it's another mathematical principle.)
The reason you write is to communicate something meaningful to people. Rules can only help about twenty percent of the way. The rest is the work you put into getting the message into the media.
New Book -- The Witch of White Lady Hollow -- by C. David Belt
Some might question whether a good Mormon could write real horror novels.
But many good Mormons read horror novels. I think I might suggest that is at least one good reason why we need good Mormon authors to write in the horror genre.
The Witch of White Lady Hollow, by C. David Belt, is a new novel in the horror/fantasy genre. When it is published, you will be able to find it in the usual places. (I had the opportunity to beta-read it through the LDS Beta Readers group on Facebook.)
The setup has a Mormon divorcee, Molly Moonshadow, moving to a 1970s backwater town in Missouri with her high school-aged daughter Tabitha, to teach, and to escape from an abusive ex-husband. She has found a cheap house outside city limits where she can live with her daughter.
That the house is haunted is probably not surprising, but what--or who haunts it, and how dangerous the haunting is, is a very interesting story that takes much of the novel to unfold.
Whether the haunting is limited to their house or extends beyond it is another question of interest, as is the involvement of the local police, other high school staff, students, and even the local branch of the Church.
Belt uses the tools of horror fantasy to explore some very real issues of abuse. Sexual preference, gender identity, power relationships, and rape are also touched on. Innocent people do get hurt, but abusive people get their just deserts (sometimes in ways that are graphic enough to turn more than the stomach -- be warned).
If you are lookig for light fantasy, this is not. But it's also not a one-way trip down.
I am not a fan of horror, so it's a little out of my genre. But I think it's a good read, and thought-provoking. I suspect that some of my friends and family who are fans of horror will find it a very good read, too.
But many good Mormons read horror novels. I think I might suggest that is at least one good reason why we need good Mormon authors to write in the horror genre.
The Witch of White Lady Hollow, by C. David Belt, is a new novel in the horror/fantasy genre. When it is published, you will be able to find it in the usual places. (I had the opportunity to beta-read it through the LDS Beta Readers group on Facebook.)
The setup has a Mormon divorcee, Molly Moonshadow, moving to a 1970s backwater town in Missouri with her high school-aged daughter Tabitha, to teach, and to escape from an abusive ex-husband. She has found a cheap house outside city limits where she can live with her daughter.
That the house is haunted is probably not surprising, but what--or who haunts it, and how dangerous the haunting is, is a very interesting story that takes much of the novel to unfold.
Whether the haunting is limited to their house or extends beyond it is another question of interest, as is the involvement of the local police, other high school staff, students, and even the local branch of the Church.
Belt uses the tools of horror fantasy to explore some very real issues of abuse. Sexual preference, gender identity, power relationships, and rape are also touched on. Innocent people do get hurt, but abusive people get their just deserts (sometimes in ways that are graphic enough to turn more than the stomach -- be warned).
If you are lookig for light fantasy, this is not. But it's also not a one-way trip down.
I am not a fan of horror, so it's a little out of my genre. But I think it's a good read, and thought-provoking. I suspect that some of my friends and family who are fans of horror will find it a very good read, too.
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How Economics 101, a Novel Got Started
Several years back, I got disgusted with the prevalence of certain themes in popular literature and started planning a novel in which two good Mormons get stranded on a desert island for a week or a month and, ohmygoodness, don't do the hankypanky.
That idea turned into my first attempt at a novel, in which two grad students at BYU go do fieldwork in an island country and find themselves stranded on a desert island for a really long time. Then I decided to use the novel to explore the economics of really living completely off the grid long term.
But the setup doesn't work at BYU for several reasons, and arranging for them to be married without leaving the island requires some elements that reach into fantasy. I initially intended to use the parallel realities conceit, but I found myself having to claim too much of my own opinions and interpretations as doctrine.
Any such claim is too much.
Passing personal opinion off as Church doctrine is basically the sin that Jesus kept calling the Pharisees, Sadducees, Lawyers, and the members of the Sanhedrin on. It damages yourself, and it is quite likely to damage others.
So I started moving the whole story to a planet called Xhilr, which has two moons, and where most modern society uses base sixteen instead of base ten (and twelve/sixty, etc.). And years have 352 or 353 days, with two short years in seven. (Fortunately, there are twelve months there, too. And weeks are seven days. And days are almost 24 of our hours, although 16 of theirs.) And I got lost in telling about a very bad monopolist who used microcomputers to capture the information industry.
And their restored gospel has a book of scripture named after a prophet called Eien-ni Phueru, or, E-P, for short. (Which was a misunderstanding on my part.) And the whole thing just kept getting further out-of-hand.
Had to lop a parse, so to speak, and back up to my initial draft. Now I'm working on moving it to Xhilr much more carefully.
I'm planning to discuss the calendar and their units of measurement in some other novel (maybe), and depend on translator's license to corrolate pieces of their history with ours. At minimum, I don't want to slow this novel down with a bunch of speculative math.
I mention the two moons and the differences enough to make it clear that Ehyephoot-ism and Mormonism are two different things, and I plan on avoiding giving a formal name to their Church.
But I do point out the parallels in a lot of places, because religion is a huge part of the story.
(This is from a post to the Facebook LDS Beta Readers group.)
It can be read here, although, as I say, I'm still in the process of moving it offworld. [JMR201804031534: Move half complete.]
That idea turned into my first attempt at a novel, in which two grad students at BYU go do fieldwork in an island country and find themselves stranded on a desert island for a really long time. Then I decided to use the novel to explore the economics of really living completely off the grid long term.
But the setup doesn't work at BYU for several reasons, and arranging for them to be married without leaving the island requires some elements that reach into fantasy. I initially intended to use the parallel realities conceit, but I found myself having to claim too much of my own opinions and interpretations as doctrine.
Any such claim is too much.
Passing personal opinion off as Church doctrine is basically the sin that Jesus kept calling the Pharisees, Sadducees, Lawyers, and the members of the Sanhedrin on. It damages yourself, and it is quite likely to damage others.
So I started moving the whole story to a planet called Xhilr, which has two moons, and where most modern society uses base sixteen instead of base ten (and twelve/sixty, etc.). And years have 352 or 353 days, with two short years in seven. (Fortunately, there are twelve months there, too. And weeks are seven days. And days are almost 24 of our hours, although 16 of theirs.) And I got lost in telling about a very bad monopolist who used microcomputers to capture the information industry.
And their restored gospel has a book of scripture named after a prophet called Eien-ni Phueru, or, E-P, for short. (Which was a misunderstanding on my part.) And the whole thing just kept getting further out-of-hand.
Had to lop a parse, so to speak, and back up to my initial draft. Now I'm working on moving it to Xhilr much more carefully.
I'm planning to discuss the calendar and their units of measurement in some other novel (maybe), and depend on translator's license to corrolate pieces of their history with ours. At minimum, I don't want to slow this novel down with a bunch of speculative math.
I mention the two moons and the differences enough to make it clear that Ehyephoot-ism and Mormonism are two different things, and I plan on avoiding giving a formal name to their Church.
But I do point out the parallels in a lot of places, because religion is a huge part of the story.
(This is from a post to the Facebook LDS Beta Readers group.)
It can be read here, although, as I say, I'm still in the process of moving it offworld. [JMR201804031534: Move half complete.]
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